LB:RR (Re-Write): Kikki, the Ancient of Emotion & Anastasia Highland

I remembered that I had completely forgotten to introduce Kikki. Whoops, the poor girl kept slipping my mind....
Kikki is an Ancient, an embodiment of Emotion, like Takuna is of Time and Light. Kikki's real name is Kikkean, but she hates it and will blow up at you if you don't call her Kikki.
Kikki resembles that of fox and squirrel combined, and measures around two-and-a-half feet tall, from head to foot, as she prefers to walk on two legs, although it's rare because she's always hovering and floating about so there's no need to walk.
She is surrounded by a marroon-colored aura that seems to serve little purpose, but it occasionally changes colors in different displays of emotions.
Kikki is Lirin's first companion in his journey, and she is highly obnoxious and short-tempered! And I keep forgetting about her and leaving her behind, so I need to work on that!

Anastasia Highland!
I made up Anastasia before Lirin became main. In fact, in the original version of their story, she was the main character, and booooooooooooy she had a bad temper. Her story has changed drastically since then, so let's move on to the present, because the old version would only make sense to those who understood. XD

She's a pale-skinned, petite, yellow-haired Evaran/Tannish half-elf, and when her home land, the Parasha Woods, was transported to Evagren for mysterious reasons, that's when her mother met her father and soon she was born. Her mother was a Tannish elf, and her father was an Evaran human.
Anastasia, however, at a young age, was sent from the woods to escape to Greenwood Forest, a place protected by a spirit who banned all evil entry. She lived there until age eight, when she met Lirin, wounded by the crazy hunter, Harthun, and his horrid rifle. Yes, those three were original characters since the beginning. Strangely makes me feel nostalgic.
Carrying on, Anastasia becomes one of Lirin's new companions and accompanies him throughout most the rest of the series, though the are separated time and time again. She's one of his closest friends, but oddly enough, neither has 'feelings' for one another, which would actually be insanely creepy on Lirin's part, as there is a rather large age gap...
But that aside, these two are very crucial characters in this series! Now introduced, that just about wraps things up for now.

Wolf

Hey, been awhile!

It's been quite a while since I last posted... the reason? There's nothing really new going on... but why am I posting now? Because that was before, and I have something to say now.

I might not seem like it, but I admit I'm pretty good at helping people with their novels. Editing, tips, critique, etc.
I've been assisting this person with their novel for some time now.
We both want to make the story better, so I've been critiquing and pointing out things and making suggestions as we go along, while still encouraging them at the same time so they don't think their novel is awful or anything like that, because, personally, I did like it, although it was only the first draft!
Now, after sorting out a too-many-characters problem, we're sorting out a new one; how to make the novel more suspenseful. I've given them some basic ideas, but I'm mulling it over still to find more. I also scan the internet for good articles, too.
So, what about you? Need help? I'm not a complete expert, but here are some things you'll expect, but some of them require me seeing the manuscript:
Tips (for pretty much anything)
Point-outs and suggestions
POLITE critique
Editing help
Revision help
Character development
Dialogue
And likely more!
I'll also help you get "unstuck" from "writers block", and I can encourage you (how)to keep moving on.
Feel free to comment here if you need help, or contact me a maryw.hills@yahoo.com. I may not be official, but I can be of some assistance, I'm sure, and I'm perfectly willing!
So, ask me anytime, and let me know if you have a deadline, too.

Wolf

LB:RR (Re-Write): The Great Ancient Takuna, Embodiment of Time and Light

Quite a long title, if I do say so myself. Unless it's a flowery priest, people normally only call him '[The] Great Takuna' or just 'Takuna'.
You know him, right? C'mon, he's got his own story, and he's in nearly all of my novels!
Well, you just might not know what he looks like; I'll describe him to you, then:
Takuna resembles a very, very big white dog or wolf, with the wings and forelegs of an eagle (you know what I mean), and the horns and eyes of a dragon.
Takuna's eyes, horns, wings and talons are all a rich gold color, and his nose is gold, too! But did you know??? His bones are gold, thus meaning his teeth are gold, too!
Takuna has a long tuft of fur at his chin, too, resembling something like a beard. He has a very noble look to him altogether, but, um, he can be a little odd at times.
As you might later notice upon reading some of my novels (one day), Takuna admits in "LB:RR" (Lirin Bahonan: Rising Rage):
"I have an odd habit of throwing suitable clothes at unfashionable heroes before I leave them to their destiny; it is the least I can do, believe me, quite literally the least..."
Yeah, he's thrown clothes at Almanzo, too, and likely some heroes before him. While Almanzo's are a dark burgundy red, Lirin's turn out to be a deep, ultramarine blue.
Takuna, while he may be one of the 'awesome creators of the planet Crichianadiie", it is true he didn't do it alone, but alongside some other great beings as well.

Takuna is noble, kind, mighty, blah-blah-blah, but he has some odd characteristics, things he says, humor, etc., and he acts incredibly weird at times...



In "LB:RR", Takuna plays an even more vital part in the story than in "E:RD" (ELDENDOR: The Rise of Dagria).
Not only does he give Lirin some new clothes, which is pretty important, but his dwelling sits right inside the very land the novel is set in, Evagren! Takuna assists Lirin often as they bump into each other, informing him of foreseen events to give him hints as to what to do, like for an example:
"I foresee a stunning journey skyward on your own gray wings and it is filled with shocking events!"
They don't make sense at first, but in later time, they do. Takuna does a little more to help, too, especially in later books, but telling you would be spoilers... Heehee.

Wolf

LB:RR (Re-Write): Lady Lenora Midnight, Creator of the Mask

Yes, precious Lady Lenora Midnight is quite a handful in the novel. Throughout the entire series, she is constantly harassing Lirin, either that, or she's discreetly flirting. She's a real creep, and she knows it.
After Bain tells Lirin that in order to save the land from his own (Lirin's own, that is) destruction, he has to make a pact with Lenora.
However, it's not quite an ideal pact. Lenora, after Lirin goes and finds her, she transports both of them to her tower, where she performs a painful spell on him, slashing up his forehead so that is bears some kind of strange mark.
It is soon that Lirin receives the curse of her latest creation... THE MASK! (Echo that twice more, fading out after the first for emphasis!)
What is the Mask, you ask?
The Mask is the dreadful creation of Lenora's, it is a 'curse' to the light and a 'blessing' to the dark. This nasty thing doesn't seem all to bad; I mean, no matter which side you take, the thing allows you to transform into a different form entirely, and it also allows telepathy and tele-transportation! Among other things; that is only a taste of what the Mask can do.
The Mask's cons? None to the dark, but it's power to the beings of light are that you must use it carefully and wisely without free will, as every time you do, it drains your own life and allows Lord Shadowfang himself to grown stronger!
...That is, for Lirin. If Lord Shadowfang is defeated, Lenora will take over, and she is eternal, so toooo bad if you wanna get rid of her. Bain is, if for some odd reason Lenora is taken down, the third-in-command for the Mask's connective power, as it needs a reliable source, after all.
Why is it called the Mask? Well, if you're in an animal form using it's power, it actually shows up on your forehead and makes you kind of look kind of like you're wearing a Mask.
It looks something like this:

 

For Lirin, in his wolf form, his eyes are under the two... Things on either side of it, making them look like angry eyebrows,  and his nose is probably a little further down below the teardrop shape.

In the Mask's transforming ability, the creature you take the form of is always back and white, where the only color is your eye color.
The purpose of taking another form is for limited disguise, new abilities, etc.. It comes in handy sometimes, but like I said before, it's to be used wisely.

Back to Lenora, if you're wondering what she looks like, well, I'll tell you:

She is tall, and resembles an ageless woman, normally wearing long black dresses and gloves. He skin is literally white, and her hair is a vibrant orange, about below-bust-length.

Her eyes are the color of orange topaz, and her eyelids are outlined in black, pointed at the end. Her lips are also black, but no one knows if it's makeup or not since they haven't seen her without it.

Despite the fact her hair is orange, her eyebrows are thin, somewhat arched and black.

Lenora has a rather sinister appearance, definitely, and quite a personality to match it.

Another thing you should know about Lenora is she is neither a being of light nor darkness, but caught in between. Like gray, as oppose to black and white.

Bain is the same. While it seems as if the two support both Lord Shadowfang and Lirin Bahonan, in truth, they are only doing it for themselves, and are very vague about how it does help them. Bain makes this clear to Lirin at some point early in the first novel.

...So, that's probably pretty much all you need to know for now. See you!

Wolf

LB:RR (Re-Write): Lukamakari, Queen and Guardian of Evagren

Or dear Lukamakari is not only the great Queen and Guardian of Evagren, but she is like a step-mother to Lirin when he shows up on her island as a wolf, with a bloody, scarred face and a lost mind.
Lukamakari takes to him at once when she hears both his first and last name, as she knows he is the direct descendant of Lyrun Bahonan, the land's previous hero two thousand years ago, whom she was quite close with since he was the only one who could tame her. She also tells Lirin a whole bunch of stuff after that, but that would probably be spoilers.
Lukamakari is obviously not human; no one knows what she is, other than Lukamakari, a Guardian. She resembles that of a lioness or panther, a plant, a reptile, and possibly a dog, all mixed together. She's green, with two long antennas coming from the back of her head, with pink flowers at the end, thinner than, but identical to, her two tails.
She has red and orange fins on her back, shoulders, hips and below ears. In fact, the ones below her ears ARE ears! They hide a pair of holes behind them, and above them are her pointed, leaf-like ears that are shaped like a wolf's almost. In short, she has two pairs of ears, and no one really knows why.
Her eyes are green, and have pink-and-black markings around them. Another thing you should know is that Lukamakari is VERY muscular, and VERY fast. Her teeth are also so long that her lips can't completely cover them, so, often, when she licks the moisture back into them, her lower canines get hooked onto her lover lip, and it's really funny. Lukamakari also has a fatally venomous bite and can blind you with the pollen stored in the flowers on her tails and antennas.
Lukamakari is a rather intriguing creature and has an unusual speaking-style, where 'you' is 'ye' and 'the' is 'da', 'that' is 'dat', and so on. Here's an unusual quote of hers for an example: 
"Ye would live longer if ye'd look b'fore ye ate..."
...That's her talking to Lirin. She cleans up the beach after hurricanes by eating all of the rubbage lying about and hocking up up somewhere else as mush. She wanted Lirin to help her, but Lirin ate one bitter leaf and immediately spat it back up, and that was where the quote came in.

So, that's Lukamakari. She appears more in the story later on after he leaves the island, too...

Wolf

LB:RR (Re-Write): Bain, the Bane of Lirin's Existence

Sorry for the lame pun. XP
Yes, you might remember that I'm rewriting the "Lirin Bahonan" series yet again, properly, this time, since Lirin has finally stopped dancing around and changing his past. Alongside "Feng Song", too, which I haven't done much with yet aside from the introduction and beginning of chapter one.

Today, our featured character is Bain!
Bain is rather grumpy and aloof, and very rarely shows any kind of emotion, and if he does, it's likely anger.
Bain is also a Riksha wolf, a type of wolf who's appearance consists of a black coat with white swirling markings all over, and gray-blue eyes.
(Female Riksha wolves, on the other hand, are 'inverted', so to speak. They're white with black swirling markings and orange eyes! Way cooler. XD)
However, Bain wasn't-- Oh, darn, did I ever tell you before? It's spoilers-- I'll stop.
So, yes, where was I? Right! So, Bain is the grumpy, aloof, muscular Riksha wolf who shows up in Lirin's home village the morning after Spring's Celebration and is instantly pursued by several villagers, including Vallin, Lirin's brother, who are all armed with rifles.
When Arvun Rokok, Lirin's 'rival', to so speak, tells Lirin he's going to go looking for the wolf and kill it himself to be a 'hero', Lirin knows he can't stop him and decides to come along to keep an eye on him.
The two find the Riksha wolf in a large clearing, and he gives them a long-winded introduction, in short, introducing himself as Bain. He claims that he is here on behalf of "Lady Lenora Midnight"'s request so that Lirin is to be informed of a certain calamitous matter at hand.
It is then that Lirin is shown Evagren's future; bleak and withering and overcast with shadow, and Bain also claims that he is the cause, and the only way to prevent the disaster is either that he, Lirin, dies, or he makes a pact with Lady Lenora Midnight.
Lirin, after much hesitance and uncertainty, accepts to make a pact with Lenora. When Bain leaves, Vallin finds Lirin and gives him a talking to, and Lirin is pretty much grounded.
After slipping out of the house at midnight, however, Lirin meets Lenora. After a confusing exchange of words, the forest catches fire, and everyone is forced out.
It's soon that Lirin is taken in by Lenora and Bain, and befalls the horrific fate of wielding the Mask, the dreaded curse of Lord Shadowfang and Lady Lenora's dark magic...

...Also note that later on, in the third book, Bain attacks Lirin (and kills him) to steal the Mask back, for it turns out he originally wanted it for himself for some personal reason. Lirin, although he makes a grand return, is pretty P.O.'d about it since on one hand, technically he didn't want it and would have gladly just handed it over, but on the other hand, this causes another problem for him to solve, and he still needs it...
It was mostly Bain who dragged Lirin into a lot of disaster. Thus giving him the fake title: "Bain, the Bane of Lirin's Existence".
LOL. Lame pun. It just popped into my head...

Wolf